Letter to Disney

[machiavelli]

Looking for some criticism before I send this one out for Save KP Day:

Disney Channel, The Walt Disney Co.
3800 W. Alameda Ave
Burbank, CA 91521

Dear Disney,

Briefly I would like to discuss your past show "Kim Possible" as compared with other modern TV shows and literature. Take for example modern bestsellers, many of which are political books that are summed up with the phrase, "Someone in power is scamming you," such as Scott McClellan's book, adding one more to the bash-Bush pile or Dick Morris' "Fleeced" bestseller.

Most successful TV shows can be summed down to the line, "**** happens." Seinfeld, Law and Order, ER, Sex and the City... the list goes on and on. Even the Simpsons. Wherelse have we heard/seen such ideals shown such as "Overcome the will to just stay alive; aim higher" such as in episode "Odds Man In" or the gloriously Feminist counter-call to what Nietzsche referred to as the call to "become mediocre" shown in "So The Drama." For these reasons I request the show be extended for a Season 5.

Sincerely,
Brandon Bennes

[lovethebeardkevin]

Pretty good maybe add some more to it and tell them to look at this site and explain exactly why you want kp back if they visit this site they will definatly see the need for the show

[eclogite]

I think the normal salutation would be Dear Sirs or to Whom It May Concern rather than Dear Disney.

You could start your second sentence with "Modern best sellers" rather than "Take for example".

The use of "heard/seen" is more appropriate to an internal memorandum rather than a business letter, "heard, seen or both" would be better usage.

The remainder presents no glaring problems, the use of good language skills and proper useage always enhances the impact of any missive sent to a governmental or business entity, though I am dubious of the impact of letter writing campaigns, but as long as it isn't a spam type scenario, it can't hurt.

[lovethebeardkevin]

I agree it needs to be very serious because this is one of the most serious matters ever!!!

[eclogite]

I'm not sure that it is one of the most serious issues ever, the probability of anyone dying or sufering serious harm if the show is indeed finally over being remote. I too would like to see more KP (preferably in movie length format rather than serial televison), but I don't see this as a major question.

However, a well writen letter employing good English, will have far more effect than a less literate offering.

[elvisjj]

nice letter machiavelli, just some of the same suggestions that eclogite mentioned, such as open it with Dear Disney Channel Executives, as we're not sure which Disney executive will get it, but at least it's addressed to one of them.

And you can mention Kim Possible DVD Boxset releases and especially Kim Possible merchandise, but overall great letter and I've P.M.ed you as well.

And welcome to THE FIGHT FOR FIVE as together we can make a difference for quality animated programming and for Kim Possible.