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Post by badgirl35 thinks Alvin is HOT! on Jun 24, 2005 15:15:20 GMT -5
Monique: Girl what was going on over there last night? Kim: I don't know what your talking about. Monique: How could you stand there like nothing happened? Monique said with a dirty look on her face. Ron: hey Kim Monique Monique: Ron, what happened between you and Kim last night? Ron: We danced no big deal. Monique: After that! Ron: oh the kiss. Monique: Thank you! Kim: No big Monique It wasn't the first time it happened. Monique: It is bi......what do you mean not the first time? Then wade popped up on the computer. Wade: hey Kim heard about last night third times a charm huh? Kim: Ok 2 things #1 the second time didn't count #2 SHUT-IT! Kim said real angry. Wade: Anyway you got a hit on the sight from your parents you and Ron meet them at BN headquarters Kim: ok Ron lets go! Ron: Oooooh come on I'll miss lunch! Kim gave him a dirty look.
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Post by badgirl35 thinks Alvin is HOT! on Jun 24, 2005 15:16:25 GMT -5
Please R&R?
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Post by molonuk on Jun 24, 2005 15:58:16 GMT -5
Is that chapte one? Because it's very good, but vey short.
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Post by Cid on Jun 24, 2005 17:34:06 GMT -5
i give it a 7 out off 10
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Mobius
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Post by Mobius on Jun 24, 2005 18:41:24 GMT -5
Interesting start. Kind of on the short side but you have a direction you are going so it is all good. Look forward to more.
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Post by badgirl35 thinks Alvin is HOT! on Jun 25, 2005 11:22:07 GMT -5
In the words of Spongebob "Meh! Everybodys a critit."
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Post by badgirl35 thinks Alvin is HOT! on Jun 26, 2005 8:47:04 GMT -5
Chapt 2
Ron: Oh BN headquarters is Beuno Nacho. Kim: Duh! Ron: How should I know? Kim: Whatever lets just go in. Kim and Ron came to a supprise inside. Everyone in Beuno Nacho: CONGRATULATIONS! Kim and Ron looked confused. Kim's mom:We've been waiting for this moment a long time. Kim: What moment? Wade pops on the Kimunicater And showed the three times Kim and Ron kissed on the wall. Wade: make way for Middletons newest couple. Ron looked at kim Ron: today gonna be a long day.
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Post by aliciamartin on Jun 26, 2005 9:15:57 GMT -5
good story here keep it up. It's really good
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Post by molonuk on Jun 26, 2005 10:44:38 GMT -5
I concure...very good!
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Post by Cid on Jun 26, 2005 18:26:35 GMT -5
your geting there
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Post by funbun on Jun 26, 2005 21:58:54 GMT -5
MORE!!!!!!
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Post by impossiblegirl on Jun 27, 2005 15:04:28 GMT -5
This is really good! I'm trying hard not to laugh right now! Keep it up!
TTYL, Impossiblegirl
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Post by Falling-Pixie on Jun 28, 2005 20:01:49 GMT -5
lol! NICE!!! LOVE IT! MORE! MORE! MORE! ;D ;D
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Post by Falling-Pixie on Jul 18, 2005 10:59:02 GMT -5
more?
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Post by kpfan313 on Sept 6, 2005 20:58:55 GMT -5
When is chapter three coming?
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Post by Falling-Pixie on Sept 7, 2005 22:19:21 GMT -5
ya! when?
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Post by kpfan313 on Oct 11, 2005 21:48:15 GMT -5
Pleeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaasse hurry up with chapter 3!!!
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Post by badgirl35 thinks Alvin is HOT! on Dec 21, 2005 18:02:43 GMT -5
Soon writters block
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Post by Yami Dymlos on Dec 21, 2005 18:09:11 GMT -5
Wow, short but good
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Post by Raptor™ on Dec 22, 2005 7:51:31 GMT -5
Pretty cool......... ;D What's next???
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