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Post by ninjanaco on Apr 12, 2008 13:22:19 GMT -5
What I would do differently if I did KP... Well, for one thing, I wouldn't try to do jokes that compromise Ron's character. I know Ron is the "comic relief," and that exaggeration is a part of his character (see his near-religious devotion to Bueno Nacho, as witnessed in the episode of that name, as well as StD), but things such as "he had to take his shoes off to count to 12" would be gone. (Episodes like "Bueno Nacho," "Sink or Swim" and "Attack of the Killer Bebes" do a good job of portraying Ron.) Mystical Monkey Power - I might get rid of it. It seems to imply a view of the supernatural than rules out Judeo-Christian monotheism, but then there are indications that it might not be supernatural at all, plus it gives Ron some fighting moves. So, if it was kept it, it'd be eventaully exposed as a technological phenomenon that Sensei was mistaken about or was keeping secret. Also, Ron would have used the MMP more often - as in using Tai Shing Pek Kwar (sp?) and manipulating the Lotus Blade (but nothing like that tacked-on "Monkey Master" fanservice in "Graduation") I'd give Joss and Zita more screen time. I think I can recall Steve Loter saying that he wanted to finish the Zita storyline, but didn't get to. And Joss deserved to be with her dad and the rest of her extended family in "Graduation." Also, while I like Felix, Zita wouldn't be dating him in the final episode- she'd have an anonymous boyfriend who looks suspiciously like I did back when I was in high school.  In "Rappin' Drakken'"- I wouldn't have Ron spend all those weeks trying to get that spoon to hang off his nose - rather, he'd come up with an elaborate and complex story that would be, in its essence, "A Sitch in Time." Kim, however, would strike down that story, citing the fact that the story has to be autobiographical. "Since when did something like that happen to us?" As I mentioned before, there'd be no "Stop Team Go" or "Bad Boy," as there'd be no Attitudinator. That thing seems to imply certain quasi-Manichean things about the nature of good and evil - blech. One thing I would to is make it clear that the tweebs are going through/have gone through puberty. (No "... on her dates! With Ron! Yuck!" as in "Gradaution.") I just think it'd be funny to see the two of them as they discover they like girls, and the innate awkwardness that comes with that... I might make Kim a good Catholic (not to make her a religious platitude-spouting drone or anything, but I can think of a number of ways Catholicism could be integrated into the show without the show losing its attitude/flavor - Ron being unable to make the Sign of the Cross correctly, Kim trying to teach CCD - with the tweebs in her class, and can't you just see Mr. Dr. P trying to encourage Kim to enter the convent?), but then I just as would leave her religious affiliation a mystery. I would also probably do "Graduation" very, very differently. Rather than an alien invasion, the main plot would be Bonnie going "hardcore" evil, with Shego as her mentor. I'd also somehow try and get Barkin in there in fully military mode, and other things. Well, I think that's all for now, I might type some more later, but I might not... |
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Post by ferryport1987 on Apr 12, 2008 18:08:07 GMT -5
hmm i like every episode the way it is...except for the less appearances of D/S and not making them couples before Graduation...and seeing them kiss similar to K/R
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Post by lonestarr357 on Apr 14, 2008 8:47:36 GMT -5
What I would do differently if I did KP... Well, for one thing, I wouldn't try to do jokes that compromise Ron's character. I know Ron is the "comic relief", and that exaggeration is a part of his character (see his near-religious devotion to Bueno Nacho, as witnessed in the episode of that name, as well as StD), but things such as "he had to take his shoes off to count to 12" would be gone. (Episodes like "Bueno Nacho", "Sink or Swim" and "Attack of the Killer Bebes" do a good job of portraying Ron.) This makes, perhaps, the two-millionth time I've said this, but 'Ron reminds me of me, I don't like seeing me humiliated, blah, blah'. It strikes me that there was no unifying hand in presenting Ron's character. One episode, he's a capable teen, the next, he's an incompetent nitwit. This point would definitely suit me fine. Also, while I like Felix, Zita wouldn't be dating him in the final episode- she'd have an anonymous boyfriend who looks suspiciously like I did back when I was in high school. Oh, you. In "Rappin' Drakken" - I wouldn't have Ron spend all those weeks trying to get that spoon to hang off his nose - rather, he'd come up with an elaborate and complex story that would be, in its essence, "A Sitch in Time". Kim, however, would strike down that story, citing the fact that the story has to be autobiographical. "Since when did something like that happen to us?" That would've been way funnier. One thing I would to is make it clear that the tweebs are going through/have gone through puberty. (No "... on her dates! With Ron! Yuck!" as in "Gradaution".) I just think it'd be funny to see the two of them as they discover they like girls, and the innate awkwardness that comes with that... That would be good, esp. if they were to run across another pair of twins. The girls, however, would want nothing to do with them. ("Sorry. We don't date twins.") can't you just see Mr. Dr. P trying to encourage Kim to enter the convent? Very much so. I would also probably do "Graduation" very, very differently. Rather than an alien invasion, the main plot would be Bonnie going "hardcore" evil, with Shego as her mentor. I'd also somehow try and get Barkin in there in fully military mode, and other things. That sounds so familiar. Bon-Bon could overreact at not getting to graduate with the rest of the class (the actual graduation taking place within the first 15 minutes). Meanwhile, Shego has reached her limit with Drakken's bumbling, and so sets out on her own. Drakken finds himself having to face his former assistant, which doesn't sting as much as having to save the world instead of rule it. An addition to my list concerns "Homecoming Upset". Instead of indulging Bonnie (much like the writer did), Kim would get it in her head that the voting was tampered with and investigate. She makes Bonnie aware that humiliating her and Ron is one thing, but humiliating them on a grand scale is quite another. This scares Bon-Bon enough to try and cover her tracks. The rest needs work, but the new version of that episode would certainly not[/b] tell the story of an obnoxious spoiled brat whose conniving and temper tantrums are rewarded with a relationship with a moneyed Eurotrash bohunk. (Seriously, what kind of freakin' message is that to send to kids?!) |
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Post by ninjanaco on Apr 14, 2008 9:46:53 GMT -5
Actually, I probably would have given at least some hint of Felix/Zita before the final episode, rather than it being "tacked on" as it seemed. (Though I think it's a good pairing, so it's no big.) |
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Post by mike on Apr 14, 2008 9:59:23 GMT -5
as for me.... raise the rating to at least PG-13 and that should give me enough satisfaction ;D
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Post by manofevil on Apr 14, 2008 14:55:55 GMT -5
An addition to my list concerns "Homecoming Upset". Instead of indulging Bonnie (much like the writer did), Kim would get it in her head that the voting was tampered with and investigate. She makes Bonnie aware that humiliating her and Ron is one thing, but humiliating them on a grand scale is quite another. This scares Bon-Bon enough to try and cover her tracks. The rest needs work, but the new version of that episode would certainly not[/b] tell the story of an obnoxious spoiled brat whose conniving and temper tantrums are rewarded with a relationship with a moneyed Eurotrash bohunk. (Seriously, what kind of freakin' message is that to send to kids?!)[/quote] I feel the need to share something I posted on the Homecoming Upset review thread. I don't usually feel the need to comment on these discussions but I will share with you all a vision I had when I watched this the first time. At the point where Riger fixes the election for Bonnie and she has her whole moment while the crowd is all dumbfounded. Suddenly one of the students sitting in the front of the stand (maybe Monique) surrounded by other students turns around and demands, "Who voted for Bonnie!" The other students look around, wondering themselves. "C'mon," says the student, "Who voted for Bonnie? Show of hands." Again, no reaction. "Who voted for Kim?" Asks the student simply. All the hands raise. At the back of the group, someone says, "Fraud" Then Someone else says, "Fraud." It becomes a chant. "Fraud!" "Fraud!" "Fraud!" It spreads through the group. "Fraud!"
"Fraud!"
"Fraud!"
"Fraud!"It spreads through the stand. "Fraud!"
"Fraud!"
"Fraud!"
"Fraud!"It spreads over the field to the point where even Bonnie's shrieks can't block it from her ears. "Fraud!"
"Fraud!"
"Fraud!"
"Fraud!"I think at that point even Barkin would feel the need to strip Bonnie of her title and see that the votes are properly counted. Thought you might enjoy that. |
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Post by Ninnik Nishukan on Apr 16, 2008 9:13:27 GMT -5
Can you REALLY see her apologizing? If you ask me, it sounds a lot more like she might have just went back because she had nothing better to do, and Drakken let her stay because, while he might never admit it, he really can't do much without Shego (Not even open a jar). So they just teamed up again and never touched the subject. There wasn't a need. Well, that's my take. Actually, I can see her maybe apologizing-- somehow, anyway. In a reluctant, not-actually-saying-the-words kinda way. I don't think she went back 'just because she didn't have anything better to do'. It's obvious that she enjoys working with Drakken. Even though they fail, and even though she often gets exasperated over him, it seems like she has fun at her job (definitely has fun with the mocking, anyway  ). And as we've seen with Warmonga (and to a degree, Frugal Lucre), she doesn't like the idea of somebody 'taking her rightful place/her job'. And like especially StD has taught us, Drakken is more than capable of doing things by himself. The whole pickle jar thing was obviously just played for laughs, like the VIPs like to do. I'm not saying they had a big dramatic reunion scene with tears and hugs or anything, I'm just saying that what happened in the first part of season 4 was unusual for Drakken and Shego and wouldn't have passed by in complete silence. Some kind of reconciliation must've taken place, whether it was serious or just something awkweird and subtle. Not just nothing. (Well, logically, anyway-- KP isn't always a logical show, though ) Drakken, for one thing, is a pretty touchy and sensitive guy, and we know he holds grudges. He would've probably wanted an apology. He seemed pretty mad at Shego in MDAA. Sorry for replying to this so late, btw. I kinda forgot about it. |
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Post by Alexlayer on Apr 16, 2008 18:32:21 GMT -5
Talk about reviving topcis. To be honest, Ninnik, my view on the issue has changed from the time I posted that. Now, I see what happened being mostly like this.
Shego was back at the spa and, in a similar fashion to "A Very Possible Christmas", she gets a call from Drakken telling her that he is stuck in an island with no way to get out alone and ask for her help, to which she, well...
"Suck it up!"
"But Shego~!"
Well, she wasn't going to drop the argument there "Call Eddie if you need someone. Me? VACATION!"
"But I can't! Ed's in prison!"
Darn it. "Then call you mommy! Or whoever you want!"
"But how I'm supposed to explain this!?"
Her fingers were about to break the cell-phone in her hands. "Then you know what, Dr. D?"
He didn't like how that sounded "...yes?"
"Get used to live with the animals" And she hang up.
Yet, while Drakken was having an exhausting fight with the mosquitoes on her second night at the island, he takes the safer end: Run away from them, and so he runs around 'til he finally miss-step somewhere and falls hard on the ground, half-growling, half-whining.
But then he heard a sight... and a voice he knew too well: "Fools can only be cured by dying"
He looked up, half-expecting his brain to be playing him a dirty trick, but she was there!
"Shego!"
She didn't reply, she just stayed in the ship (How was Drakken's typical vehicle called?) and waited for him to get on it, then she got both of them flying away, both in some kind of awkward silence that Drakken barely dared to break.
"T-thank you..."
She didn't reply, but, with the side of her lips he couldn’t see from his position, she smirked.
The rest of the trip was carried away in silence.
The following days, they expended them re-building the lair and re-hiring the henchmen.
And this is where I put an end to this Cookie. Like it? Hated it? Whatever...
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Post by Ninnik Nishukan on Apr 16, 2008 19:47:04 GMT -5
I'd imagine he'd be a little less pathetic/a little angrier and she'd be just a little less cold. There wouldn't exactly be any swelling music and tearful forgiveness, though, no. It's a hover car. |
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Post by Alexlayer on Apr 16, 2008 22:05:24 GMT -5
I'd imagine he'd be a little less pathetic/a little angrier and she'd be just a little less cold. I figured that, since he already tried the Angry thing in MDAA (and that cookie would be placed right after that), he would know better.  That, and I doubt Shego would have already forgotten all about that. |
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Post by Ninnik Nishukan on Apr 16, 2008 22:29:15 GMT -5
I'd imagine he'd be a little less pathetic/a little angrier and she'd be just a little less cold. I figured that, since he already tried the Angry thing in MDAA (and that cookie would be placed right after that), he would know better. That, and I doubt Shego would have already forgotten all about that. I guess we come at this from different angles, eh? Yeah, angry, I dunno-- at least less pathetic. |
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Post by cadmus on Apr 18, 2008 1:10:17 GMT -5
After reading Brian Swenlin's first draft of Ill Suited, I thought there was alot of funny material that should've made it to the screen: So for Ill Suited I'm gonna insert in what should've been on here IMO: -Credit teaser (wouldn't change a thing) - Show the desolate plains scene to give a little more cinematic feel to the episode. - Science Bunker: Add to Dementor's to do list, to use his newest camera invention to take a picture that copies the secret program to his camera CD (i.e. it works the same way the mecha cat did). But once he sees Kim's battlesuit in action he decides to change his plans and use his camera to copy Kim's battlesuit program. (I also think Kim's battle with the henchmen could've been a lot more creative fight wise, I would've gotten a storyboard artist whose known for great action sequences (like Adam Van Wyk, Troy Adomitis, or the best person available at that time). -High School sign, locker scene, Ron's paranoid mode: wouldn't change a thing. -Football scene 1: Add in the point about Barkin taking over for Mr. Turner (IF THERE'S TIME). -I'd scrap out Dementor's second scene since he already has the program. That and I find Dementor to be boring.  Instead I would use the mountain cat scene with the old lady scene from "Larry's Birthday". Ron would still get ripped to shreds, it would cut to commercial break when Kim sees how big the cat is. In Act 2 she would eventually handle it. AND RON DECLARES THE OLD LADY TO BE EVIL! ;D Kim reports back to Wade, and Ron formulates THE PLAN. -In the high school yard I'd put in Ron thinking to himself "It will take everything I've learned to obtain Kim's battlesuit."after Ron says "I'm feeling just super!" THEN it cuts to him knocking on the door telling the Possibles he left his homework in Kim's room upstairs. Kim's parents let him in after saying they have no reason to distrust him. ;D (Ron looks the other way when they say this). Upstairs Ron tells Rufus "It's not stealing, it's secret borrowing." Also saying "getting Kim's battlesuit will be a piece of cake. THEN it cuts to Kim's room with Ron hanging upside down, his feat tied up, his pants at his ankles, and the alarm going off. ;D Until Jim and Tim come in (and I'd keep the rest of what's on Mr. Swenlin's script, (especially the hilarious clock wipe scenes) right up to Ron finally getting the suit. -Football field scene 2: Wouldn't change a thing. -Football game #1: In Swenlin's script the part where Jim and Tim are shown show Mr. and Mrs. Possible sitting next to the tweebs. The rest is fine as it is. -Bueno Nacho fight: Only thing that needs changing is to replace Dementor's line about Ron wearing the girly clothes. Replace it with something about Ron being liar, liar, pants on fire with some sort of Nacospeak ad lib to change it. Also keep the same storyboard artist from the science bunker fight on this one. The rest is fine. -Possible household (as seen in Brian Swenlin's first draft) Keep as is. -Locker room scene: (as seen in Brian Swenlin's first draft) -Football game #2: Keep as is from Brian Swenlin's script, with Tom Hart's add on's, especially the kiss between Kim and Ron. -Locker scene 2: Change "running record", to "Rushing Record" Keep the end credits as well. For those that might not know about Swenlin's first draft here's a link for you, www.swenlin.com/. Thoughts anyone. |
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Post by cadmus on Apr 19, 2008 16:10:29 GMT -5
Okay, back for more: Car Alarm:-Instead of Motor Ed having what looks like a god awful power rangers figure as a car. Give him a 20 foot monster truck that's tricked out with weapons. Having Motor Ed driving a Monster Truck fits his MO better IMO. -I remember Loter saying they were going for a My Name is Earl vibe for Shego's outfit. If that's the case then to complete the disguise, they should've brought back Shego's sarcastic cowboy dialogue(from Showdown At The Crooked D). ;D -Keep Shego and Motor Ed in the car the whole time, Shego would blast Motor Ed to Kingdom come instead. When Kim stops the car, it would be right next to prison, where Kim would quip about how conveinient it is for her, Shego, & Motor Ed to be stopped right at prison for drop off. Everything else is fine.Trading Faces:-Replace the dialogue of where the tweebs say "Maybe you've got a shapeshifter on your hands." With them saying, "Can we make a suggestion?" Also take out Kim and Ron's exchange where they say, "You mean like the tweebs said?","Okay they were right" What this does is keep the secret of Camille being a shapeshifter a little while longer. Up until J & T say "Nanomorphing? Shapeshifting." The rest is good.The Big Job:At the end when Shego is in the alligator pit, have Junior tell Shego about a circled lever that makes part of a side wall into a secret passage (like in those Scooby Doo episodes) drain that slides to the outside. This sets up that Shego is still on the loose in the next episode. |
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Post by garnetblack on Apr 21, 2008 9:29:26 GMT -5
Okay, back for more: The Big Job:At the end when Shego is in the alligator pit, have Junior tell Shego about a circled lever that makes part of a side wall into a secret passage (like in those Scooby Doo episodes) drain that slides to the outside. This sets up that Shego is still on the loose in the next episode. Is Mad Dogs and Aliens right after this one chronologically? If so, then after exiting through the secret passage you described, she could say something to the effect of "I need a vacation." |
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Post by cadmus on Apr 25, 2008 0:03:44 GMT -5
Mad Dogs And Aliens:-I was a little disappointed in some of the subtle touches, in both Warmonga battles. -In the first Warmonga confrontation, Warmonga never gets knocked into the tv screen, just cut to her ricocheting Shego's blasts, then she blocks Shego's kick by grabbing her foot, then the electric snake thingy comes off her arm and she tosses Shego into the tv screen. I'd also squeeze Drakken's "This is why we can't have nice things." line in after Shego gets thrown in to the big screen. This builds up some slight tension for the Kim-Warmonga battle as Warmonga ends up defeating Shego without being harmed in the slightest. -In the second battle w/Kim just after she catches the laser beam and she says "they play catch on your planet?" As Kim sends it back to Warmonga, Warmonga would jump up in the air to dodge it. Then Kim would do a high jump kick that sends Warmonga into the big screen electrocuting her. The other touch is when Kim is behind her shield, the shield would glitch, as Kim notices, she says "I thought Wade fixed it." Then Warmonga would nail her. As an add on to the dr.claw type scene I mentioned in my last post: -There would be two other characters in the background: Warhok & Warlika, these two would be Warmonga's battlemates and together they make the WarTrio. The ideas for these two are based on model sheets that these two seemed to have floating around on kpfanworld: -Warhok's is based on the last Misc. Portfolio (on the bottom second to left design) in this link: www.kpfanworld.com/view_pic/port/9.jpg-Warlika's will be based on the second Misc. portfolio design (that's right below Warmonga's) in this link: www.kpfanworld.com/view_pic/port/10.jpgFor Warlika, I'd give her eyes color and pupils, like Warmonga's eyes. And to give her wings in the back, her height would be the shortest of the bunch (around Kim and Ron's height). Warhok would probably be just an inch shorter than Warmonga. Both Warhok and Warlika's coloring would be changed to blend in with Warmonga and the backgrounds as well. -Obviously the new villain will have a different name since Warhok is taken. (More on that later). -And the dr.claw type scene would end with this figure watching a monitor screen that shows the MHS football field in a creepy scene that has no music and it lingers there for about 3-4 seconds. Then it cuts to The high school ending scene. Fashion Victim:-The warehouse fight scene with the fashionista's could've been a little better staged, I would've got maybe an action type storyboard artist on those scenes. Maybe it was slowed down because of Monique, but it is a nitpick non the less. -At the end scene, when Camille's disguise of Kim is seen through by Monique, instead of getting arrested; she makes a run for outside where there's a crowd of people. Team Possible gives up, since Camille could be any one of the crowd members. Then we cut to Kim saying "Good eye back there, Monique."...and you know the rest. ;D
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Post by cadmus on Apr 29, 2008 3:33:46 GMT -5
Grande Size Me:Let me start off by saying that in no way do I think this is a bad episode. I think it's alot of fun though. And there's a lot of room for improvement. For starters I would've brought back Dr. Director since Global Justice is involved. And as I mentioned in another thread I would've of recasted her with Maria Canalis. Her Hawkgirl voice from JL(U) wasn't that far off from what Felicity Huffman sounded like in the role, and Maria wouldn't be that hard to get considering that she would later have a role on a Disney Channel sitcom (Wizards of Waverly Place). -I would cut the first Hench co scene where the one device gets set up for an auction. (See next reason for why) - In the 2nd Bueno Nacho scene, Wade would link Kim through to Dr. Director. She recruits Kim for a top secret mission: A device from Global Justice headquarters was stolen by Gemini and in an encounter between her and him, the device some how ended up at Hench Co. and is being auctioned off that night to a group of super villains including her twin brother. She would go but Gemini is some how able to track her and the rest of GJ, so she wants Kim to go in her place. She'll guide Kim through the place to find the device on the Kimmunicator, once Kim gets there. -Hench co. scene: I liked the idea of giving all the villains on there screentime, I'd also throw in Motor Ed and Camille Leon. Drakken and Shego would be sitting on opposite ends. Jr. is complaining to Sr. about having to waste an evening at an auction, and DNAmy has developed a crush on Professor Dementor for some unknown reason much to his annoyance. ;D I would also get either Nicole Sullivan, Ashley Tisdale, or Maria Canalis to replace Grey DeLisle as the gal in blue, nothin against her it just makes it easier with so many voice actors in the studio already it seems redundant to use her for such a small part. The rest I would keep. -In the vent. Kim is speaking both to Ron and Dr. Director in this part. -In the fight Kim along with what does happen, also dodges rockets by Gemini, and Monkey Fist also confronts her when the monkey ninjas fail. When Ron comes back from Project Titan; the Seniors, Camille Leon, Duff Killigan, and DNAmy are the ones who make the comments about how out of shape Ron is. Monkey Fist then makes the sarcastic remark, "Why did everyone stop fighting?" Dementor says "well do you see the size of this boy" DNAmy seconds him and Dementor wants none of her. And Shego says, "I agree with the Monkey Man, who cares about the sidekick just get them." Kim asks Wade for the car to come in. It causes a big crash that causes everyone to duck and cover, allowing Kim and Ron to grab to get the device and leave. -Kim talks to Director about meeting GJ at a gas station tonight. Then talks to Wade. -I'd cut out the lunch cafeteria scene, since it's more disgusting and not funny. I don't think they were going for that anyways. -I'd cut out Monique's voice in the mall since she only says one line, and Kim is capable of saying it anyways. Now the chase parts: All the Hulk-Ron parts can stay. ;D -Motor Ed pulls up next to Kim, wanting the device. She obviously refuses, then wants a race. Kim obliges, and leaves Motor Ed in the dust and his car has been totaled. He replies, "This bites, I wish I was back in the slammer with Smarty Mart boy." -At the gas station, they arrive as an attendant says he'll fill the tank up. The tweebs go get some candy. Kim encounters Shego on top of the building and Shego starts blasting at her, eventually Kim deals with her. And the tweebs come out only to find along with Kim that the attendant was Camille Leon who drives off with the car and the device. The tweebs tell Wade to activate the ejector seat to get rid of Camille. Kim gets her car back as Director says she'll find Kim and meet with her. -At the bridge scene there's a part where Kim's car is surrounded. On one side is Gemini with his Jeep and branded symboled henchmen to his right is Monkey Fist with his Van and Monkey Ninjas, and to Gemini's left is The Seniors in their black helicopter and his blue henchmen on the ground. On the other side in the center is the limo with Jack Hench's Henchmen. To the left is Drakken in his hover vehicle with his red henchmen on the ground. To the right is Dementor in his yellow hover vehicle, with his gray henchmen on the ground. Gemini tells Kim that she's surrounded, and tells the rest of the villains first one to get the device keeps it. Then the donut Hulk-Ron chases ramps off the limo and Ron steps on Dementors vehicle and all the other cars back off as Kim gives chase to Ron. Dementor comments at least it can't get any worse. DNAmy then pops out of his vehicle and comments "I found you." Which causes him to scream and run off in panic. ;D -Kim contacts Wade about the Ron problem, cut out the apple from this. Kim also asks Wade "Will this work?" Wade responds, "According to Project Titan his body is in hyperactive mode, it'll work". Then comes the Drakken scene as planned. ;D -The scenes with Ron eating the healthy food still take place. -Keep the scene with Ron chasing Kim and knocking the limo out of the way. I actually liked the Bruce Banner/Betty Ross homage from this scene. -The scene where Kim stops is with The seniors helicopter instead of Gemini. Jr. replies "After we get the device can we go, I have a social life." Sr. replies "We're gonna get the device first and you'll like it." Ron knocks the chopper into a Cow n' Chow logo. Jr: Can we go now? Sr: Fine. -Next the mini-golf course fun: First Duff Killigan tries to the device from Kim (At the mini golf course DUH!). But Ron stepping on his favorite Golf Cart greatly upsets him. Keep the Monkey Fist scene as is. After Ron is reverted back to normal Dr. Director shows up in a chopper, Kim sets Ron down and is about to give Dr. Director the device, but suddenly Gemini shows and has Ron's body on his shoulder. As Kim responds, "I knew we missed one." Gemini makes an offer: Ron for the device, or he'll blast him. He also has an exchange with Dr. Director. But a magnet from Kim's car pulls Gemini onto it, as Kim discovers the tweebs activated the device. Kim didn't even know the car had a magnet. Director says she'll take the device, and Gemini back to GJ. What this revision does is set up massive amounts of screen time for the villains so anyone who might not like the PSA stuff can at least find entertainment in the Mad, Mad, Mad World type situations with the villains and the silly side stories along with them.
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Post by Mickey on Apr 29, 2008 11:17:54 GMT -5
Trading Faces:
I would start by burning the script, and giving Camille Leon's shape shifting powers to someone else. Anyone else.
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Post by ninjanaco on Apr 29, 2008 11:30:02 GMT -5
Low Budget:
When Kim mocks the fact that Lucre only wants a dollar from everyone on earth, instead of Lucre saying "Every dollar counts," I'd have him say something like "do the math." After all, even if he only gets money from the First World citizens that can afford even, or even just the US of A, that's still a considerable sum (and at such a small cost to the average (non-poor) person...)
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Post by Mickey on Apr 29, 2008 11:37:54 GMT -5
Low Budget: When Kim mocks the fact that Lucre only wants a dollar from everyone on earth, instead of Lucre saying "Every dollar counts," I'd have him say something like "do the math." After all, even if he only gets money from the First World citizens that can afford even, or even just the US of A, that's still a considerable sum (and at such a small cost to the average (non-poor) person...) Yeah, the current estimated population in the US is 303,965,081 (at the time of this posting.) If I were Lucre, I would have looked at Kim and said, "You're failing Math, aren't you?" |
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Post by cadmus on Apr 29, 2008 22:29:41 GMT -5
Clothes Minded:
-Since so many people have complained about it (mostly in this thread), I decided to add a part of development for Drakken and Shego. At the beginning of the first college lair scene, There would be a scene where Drakken thanks Shego for coming back to him. To which Shego replies, "Hey I only came back because you said things were going to be different from now on." Drakken: "Oh they will be Shego, from now on I think big. From now on I'm taking the scale from here (has his hand flat at his ankle) to here (raises his hand up above his head where he's standing on his tippy toes)". Shego replies she just wants to see results.
And at the end of the episode, when the plan goes wrong she ditches him, and Drakken leaves on his own. This sets up a reoccuring gag where Shego ditches Drakken every time something goes south or she's not satisfied (like in Clean Slate & The Mentor of Our Discontent). This bit of development at least fleshes out Drakken and Shego a little bit more.
-Another bit of development would be Drakken from now on remembering Ron Stoppable's name. It makes that scene between him and Ron in So The Drama feel more poignant.
The Cupid Effect:
Wouldn't change a thing.
Odds Man In:
-Since people complained so much about the stupid origin of Kim's new Kimmunicator, in the factory scene put a throw away scene where Kim thanks Wade for the new Kimmunicator, and Wade would explain why he made it.
The rest doesn't need changing.
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