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Post by PoisonousAngel on Sept 18, 2008 0:58:01 GMT -5
My first Kim Possble FanFic. Summary: After the big fight with Electronique, Shego still has a heart of gold. But what if she missed the beam to turn her back evil? And what if Drakken found her that way? www.fanfiction.net/s/4544429/1/Evil_Divine ;D |
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Post by Ninnik Nishukan on Sept 18, 2008 8:34:08 GMT -5
LOL! Yeah, I did ask myself that question!  I even went as far as to start writing a fic about it earlier this year, actually, but it's okay that you're writing it, because I was pretty much ready to scrap my version, anyway. XD It was called Go Jane Go! (I dunno why) and the action was seen from Kim and Drakken's points of view (like Kim and Shego's POVs in Riverside Fun). And Attitudinated!Shego really drove Drakken nuts, like Attitudinated!Drakken did to Shego in Bad Boy. It's only natural to wonder, considering Shego got to meet Attitudinated!Drakken in Bad Boy. It might have been interesting if Drakken got to meet Attitudinated!Shego in Stop Team Go. *nods* Well, I'm gonna stick around and see what you do with this one. Good luck!  |
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Post by PoisonousAngel on Sept 18, 2008 15:12:12 GMT -5
LOL! Yeah, I did ask myself that question! I even went as far as to start writing a fic about it earlier this year, actually, but it's okay that you're writing it, because I was pretty much ready to scrap my version, anyway. XD It was called Go Jane Go! (I dunno why) and the action was seen from Kim and Drakken's points of view (like Kim and Shego's POVs in Riverside Fun). And Attitudinated!Shego really drove Drakken nuts, like Attitudinated!Drakken did to Shego in Bad Boy. It's only natural to wonder, considering Shego got to meet Attitudinated!Drakken in Bad Boy. It might have been interesting if Drakken got to meet Attitudinated!Shego in Stop Team Go. *nods* Well, I'm gonna stick around and see what you do with this one. Good luck! Thank you so much. It should be good fun to read. Everything's all planned out, and I'm sure people will like it. |
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Post by Twila Starla on Sept 22, 2008 13:22:07 GMT -5
Whoo! A funny and fun start to a great AU idea! You had it spot-on, girl! Excellent! ;D Hope to read more soon! |
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Post by PoisonousAngel on Sept 22, 2008 14:40:29 GMT -5
Whoo! A funny and fun start to a great AU idea! You had it spot-on, girl! Excellent! ;D Hope to read more soon! Thanks so much, Twil! ;D |
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Post by Mickey on Sept 23, 2008 13:59:03 GMT -5
I have a sneaking suspicion that I'm going to enjoy this story. No idea why, though.  |
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Post by The Yetimonster on Sept 23, 2008 15:45:21 GMT -5
Looks like it'll be a fun story. *cough* It's a Roth SL Coupe, not a VeeDub *cough* |
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Post by PoisonousAngel on Sept 23, 2008 17:01:46 GMT -5
Looks like it'll be a fun story. *cough* It's a Roth SL Coupe, not a VeeDub *cough* I know, but everytime I see it I think it's a VW.  |
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Post by PoisonousAngel on Sept 23, 2008 17:02:09 GMT -5
I have a sneaking suspicion that I'm going to enjoy this story. No idea why, though. Thank you. ;D |
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Post by PoisonousAngel on Sept 23, 2008 23:38:31 GMT -5
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Post by Ninnik Nishukan on Sept 25, 2008 7:31:50 GMT -5
Hey, just left you a long review for chapter 2. I think this story has the potential to get very interesting. Here's one thing I completely missed in the review, BTW: He shook his head quickly as an image of Shego in her little red car being demolished by some oncoming semi truck.This sentence lacks a verb/description at the end-- what does the object 'an image of Shego in her little red car being demolished by some oncoming semi truck' do? You start out with 'He shook his head quickly as an image of Shego in her little red car being demolished by some oncoming semi truck', but you don't complete the sentence. Maybe 'He shook his head quickly as an image of Shego in her little red car being demolished by some oncoming semi truck flashed across his mind' or something like that could work? Anyway, I have your story on alert and will be following it. |
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Post by Dippy on Sept 25, 2008 11:51:32 GMT -5
This'll be the first thing I check out when I get back from my trip. ;D
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Post by PoisonousAngel on Sept 25, 2008 13:40:56 GMT -5
Hey, just left you a long review for chapter 2. I think this story has the potential to get very interesting. Here's one thing I completely missed in the review, BTW: He shook his head quickly as an image of Shego in her little red car being demolished by some oncoming semi truck.This sentence lacks a verb/description at the end-- what does the object 'an image of Shego in her little red car being demolished by some oncoming semi truck' do? You start out with 'He shook his head quickly as an image of Shego in her little red car being demolished by some oncoming semi truck', but you don't complete the sentence. Maybe 'He shook his head quickly as an image of Shego in her little red car being demolished by some oncoming semi truck flashed across his mind' or something like that could work? Anyway, I have your story on alert and will be following it. Thanks so much. I'm gonna reply to it right after this. Have you ever written a line, and then re-read it and re-read, and it seemed right to you every time? Every time I finish a chapter I re-read it about 5 times, just to make sure I haven't misspelled anything or forgot a letter in some word or if I wanted to add a little extra something. I guess thats what happened with that line. It just seemed right to me.  Silly me. But thanks for pointing that out. |
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Post by PoisonousAngel on Sept 25, 2008 13:41:15 GMT -5
This'll be the first thing I check out when I get back from my trip. ;D Goodie. ;D |
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Post by Ninnik Nishukan on Sept 25, 2008 14:43:52 GMT -5
Hey, just left you a long review for chapter 2. I think this story has the potential to get very interesting. Here's one thing I completely missed in the review, BTW: He shook his head quickly as an image of Shego in her little red car being demolished by some oncoming semi truck.This sentence lacks a verb/description at the end-- what does the object 'an image of Shego in her little red car being demolished by some oncoming semi truck' do? You start out with 'He shook his head quickly as an image of Shego in her little red car being demolished by some oncoming semi truck', but you don't complete the sentence. Maybe 'He shook his head quickly as an image of Shego in her little red car being demolished by some oncoming semi truck flashed across his mind' or something like that could work? Anyway, I have your story on alert and will be following it. Thanks so much. I'm gonna reply to it right after this. Have you ever written a line, and then re-read it and re-read, and it seemed right to you every time? Every time I finish a chapter I re-read it about 5 times, just to make sure I haven't misspelled anything or forgot a letter in some word or if I wanted to add a little extra something. I guess thats what happened with that line. It just seemed right to me. Silly me. But thanks for pointing that out. Got the reply. Thanks for the minor spoilers. ;D It all sounds promising. XD And don't feel bad about that line-- I mean, you saw what I did, right? I even quoted it in my review as one of my favorite lines, completely missing the flaw! XD Sometimes things like that just pass by our radars unnoticed. @____@ |
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Post by PoisonousAngel on Sept 25, 2008 17:18:11 GMT -5
Thanks so much. I'm gonna reply to it right after this. Have you ever written a line, and then re-read it and re-read, and it seemed right to you every time? Every time I finish a chapter I re-read it about 5 times, just to make sure I haven't misspelled anything or forgot a letter in some word or if I wanted to add a little extra something. I guess thats what happened with that line. It just seemed right to me. Silly me. But thanks for pointing that out. Got the reply. Thanks for the minor spoilers. ;D It all sounds promising. XD And don't feel bad about that line-- I mean, you saw what I did, right? I even quoted it in my review as one of my favorite lines, completely missing the flaw! XD Sometimes things like that just pass by our radars unnoticed. @____@ Thanks. Things do just pass by. Like I didn't even notice how in the new oneshot of The Ones That Never Happened that Grande Size Me was before MDAA. Haha. It didn't bother me one bit because I didn't even realize. But I wouldn't have cared anyways. No need to feel bad about it. |
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Post by PoisonousAngel on Sept 30, 2008 1:12:28 GMT -5
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Post by PoisonousAngel on Oct 8, 2008 0:33:05 GMT -5
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Post by PoisonousAngel on Oct 15, 2008 1:33:25 GMT -5
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Silly me. But thanks for pointing that out.