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[VICIOUS]

Posted for critique and editing, before i decide to go through and make an actual comic out of it :3
Whaddya think? What should i change? I'm sure some stuff needs to be redrawn xD BTW, the four of them are driving towards the tricity museum to steal the monkey idol thing, only to suddenly be struck by the repaired time stream at the end of the movie.


F1-
Dr D: So why are we stealing this again?
M.F.: The Tempus Simia, when aligned with it's head, will grant us the ability to--
F2: *TimeStreamed*
F3: *van stops*
...
F5: *speechless*
f6:*claps* Well that didn't work! Score!

[wanderingslacker]

I think I speak for everyone when I say:

Uhh... what?

[Bring]

I like it Vicious, you drew all the characters nicely and really captured their expressions well, also the panels are composed well. In terms of a critique I woudl just tighten up panel 5 and think about the backgrounds then this will be looking really good. Good work Vicious!

[VICIOUS]

wanderingslacker said:

I think I speak for everyone when I say:

Uhh... what?

Remember how at the end of A sitch in Time, when Kim and run were hit with the time wave thing, and suddenly showed signs of remembering what just happened in the movie? I wanted to see what it woulda been like on Shego's side.. She could easily induce some fear in her co-workers if they remembered that whole sitch XD

Thanks bring, don't worry, i'll do backgrounds.

[CDB]

Hmmm...interesting. Since this is just a rough ketch, I'll overlook somethings, but in Panel 2, Killagian's face could be redefined a bit more.

But other than that. Good job.

[VICIOUS]

>.> Do ya think it's worth going through all the way, or should i toss this one aside and do something more humorous or actiony?

[Nueva Paz]

I love the second and fourth panels, they're faces are just priceless. XD And I love shego's expression in panel 6, too.

Kim and Ron didn't really remember anything from the time traveling adventure, though. Ron just randomly said something about hating meatcakes, and then he had no idea why he said it.

[VICIOUS]

nuevapaz said:

I love the second and fourth panels, they're faces are just priceless. XD And I love shego's expression in panel 6, too.

Kim and Ron didn't really remember anything from the time traveling adventure, though. Ron just randomly said something about hating meatcakes, and then he had no idea why he said it.

I like to think they remembered the whole thing, very vaguely, like when your walking around in the middle of the day and a dream you had a night or 2 ago suddenly hits you in the face.. Or is that just me?
and i drew killigan being extra freaked on account he finds himself to be a cyborg..

"Aye, wha' happened to mi bo'y?"

[Nueva Paz]

vicious713 said:

nuevapaz said:

I love the second and fourth panels, they're faces are just priceless. XD And I love shego's expression in panel 6, too.

Kim and Ron didn't really remember anything from the time traveling adventure, though. Ron just randomly said something about hating meatcakes, and then he had no idea why he said it.

I like to think they remembered the whole thing, very vaguely, like when your walking around in the middle of the day and a dream you had a night or 2 ago suddenly hits you in the face.. Or is that just me?
and i drew killigan being extra freaked on account he finds himself to be a cyborg..

"Aye, wha' happened to mi bo'y?"

Hmm, well I guess that's possible. I do like the idea that they would suddenly remember stuff like that. Though I think Kim and Ron would have had a stronger reaction if that was the case. It's still a fun scenario. I can see them suddenly stopping in their tracks, and it would be like
both: WOAH!
Kim: Well, that was...weird.
Ron: Yeah... *pause* Wanna go get some nacos?

Or...y'know...something like that. ^^;

Anyway, I like the comic and the idea behind it either way. You could just leave it as it is. It gets the point across. No need to get fancy. :3

[VICIOUS]

But it's not a comic just yet xD And it's n'ye illegible, lass.

[Nueva Paz]

I can read it.
I'm just sayin', if it was me, I wouldn't bother putting a bunch of effort into a single humor strip. But I'm also lazy, and comics are something I don't usually do often.

[VICIOUS]

nuevapaz said:

I can read it.
I'm just sayin', if it was me, I wouldn't bother putting a bunch of effort into a single humor strip. But I'm also lazy, and comics are something I don't usually do often.

I hardly do the stuff too, but i'm good at it, really good at it, and nobody knows this..

And i wanna do something that'll show i'm good at it.. >.>; and and..

and.. darn levelord.. cause i'm good at it too.. ;D

[Nueva Paz]

Well, that's perfectly alright for you, then. I suck at drawing comics.
Whatever you do with it is up to you, though.

[metaljudas]

You want an explanation to why the villains could be able to remember the alternative future, but not the heroes?

Kim and Ron traveled back and forth in time using time machines.
The villains traveled using the monkey idol.

Maybe the direct exposure to the idol's "magic" allows them to remember the destroyed timeline while Ron and Kim just can't.

[teztor123]

The thing is ... when the idols were destroyed ... everything went back to the way it was at the begining of the movie. Kim & Ron had a brief feeling of oddness and Ron had a sudden hate for meat cakes but that was it. They didn't really remember anything because it hadn't happened yet.

Now ... the Villians - they knew what they were about to do. So ... they wouldn't have to remember what had happened.

It could just be Shego laughing at the boy's failed plot the way she always does. They wouldn't have to remember what she'd done during the plot. Though possibly they might have a vague feeling about it the way Ron had his sudden revulsion towards meat cakes.

Whether or not it's worth doing is up to you. It is kind of funny even without them remembering what Shego had done. Kind of an "OK We're going to do this and this and this and ... ooops ... never mind," type of thing.

[wanderingslacker]

Now that you've explained it, I really like the idea. I'll leave it up to you to decide if you want to color or continue this though.

[VICIOUS]

Thanks, i guess i should go through and finalize it a bit >.>

[Dippy]

teztor123 said:

The thing is ... when the idols were destroyed ... everything went back to the way it was at the begining of the movie. Kim & Ron had a brief feeling of oddness and Ron had a sudden hate for meat cakes but that was it. They didn't really remember anything because it hadn't happened yet.

Now ... the Villians - they knew what they were about to do. So ... they wouldn't have to remember what had happened.

It could just be Shego laughing at the boy's failed plot the way she always does. They wouldn't have to remember what she'd done during the plot. Though possibly they might have a vague feeling about it the way Ron had his sudden revulsion towards meat cakes.

Whether or not it's worth doing is up to you. It is kind of funny even without them remembering what Shego had done. Kind of an "OK We're going to do this and this and this and ... ooops ... never mind," type of thing.

Well when the idol was destroyed in the future it got destroyed in the past as well. Which explain's why the timeline was restored. It's like it never excisted. The villains would actually be confused about why they're in a van together.

[VICIOUS]

I like the idea of them remembering something *pouts*