A Nacospeak Fanfiction!

[mrpotty]

I already posted this on other KP boards and maybe some of you will read this and say "Hey, MrPotty is also this guy!" and you are right. Got many different Names...(But I'
m not Dr. Drakken!)
Anyway: When you speak (or better read) g erman, you are maybe interested in my first KP Fanfiction (I wrote some Fairly Oddparents Fics) "Shego on the Road".
Chapter 1 is up and it's rated 12 for some dark humor and a little bit violence (Hey, it's about Shego and we all know how angry she can be )
Anyway. Enjoy...if you can...
Maybe I translate it later:
www.fanfiktion.de/s/423e802c000015a4065084d0

[ShadowGirl]

I went to the page and only have one thing to say...HUH?

[mrpotty]

Why huh?

[LicaWolf]

MrPotty said:

Why huh?

I think she needs to wait for the translated version. So do I, sorry

[Laur Stoppable]

me too, cuz I am not Nacospeak.

[mrpotty]

Sorry, but I write much better in Nacospeak than in english, so you still have to wait a few weeks.
But I wonder if anybody here read it who understands this language?

[Carbon]

Well I was bored and kinda translated half of it. this is the "bored, but not bored enough to get out a dictionary" edition. so some of it is probably not quite right.


In "Attack of the Killer Bebes" Dr Drakken built woman robots, to get revenge on his school buddies. Shego was gone for the entire episode. Steve Loter, who works on the series, said once that she was not in that episode because she was at a wedding that time. This is the rest of the story of Shego's absence.

It is a normal day in Dr. Drakken's lair.

Drakken's henchmen sit in front of the TV and watch soap operas some were baking blueberry muffins. A few of them were naping. That prings us to the point: They were all doing things they weren't supposed to be doing. Drakken himself was engrossed in his work. He was just about to complete his newest creation, Somethign that he had been working to perfect for decades: Robot women! He knew that this discovery would not only finally earn the respect of his old freinds, but would also bring him one step closer to world domination.

as we all know, something would go wrong (?)... (I think?)

Drakken's workshop door opened and Shego came in.
"I am outta here" she said
Drakken shrugged suprisedly and turned around.
"outta here?! where are you going? and why are you dressed up?"
This time, Shego wasn't wearing her normal uniform, that she almost always wore. She had, as she called it, "casual clothes" on. These "casual clothes" were antything but a plain old sweatsuit. They were all the best brands from Club Bannana- Not to exagerate, but not only were they elegant enough to get envious stares, but expensive enough too, not that she paid anything for them....

"What do you mean" she said annoyed.
"I told you that I'm going to take the next three days off to visit an old friend."
Dr. Drakken thought about it a bit and decided, "No."
"What? the wedding? of my old rival from school Jessica? who was always second best when I was always first? who swore to get revenge on me at the graduation ball?"
Drakken thought about it again: "No."

"Ugh, why do I even talk to you at all?! I mean, you are making women out of metal!"

Shego turned and left, shaking her head.

Drakken called out after her: "Titanium! regular metal would be far too weak! Do you hear me, Shego? I keep talking and you are only interested in your own little world! And what finger is that? I hope that was only your index finger! Shego?! I'm talking to you young lady!"
Shego ignored Drakken as usual and kept walking. As Drakken went back to working on his robots, but he couldn't help smiling. He must have known how shego was going to the ball. with the puffy frill dress. Probably going with the star quarterback in his car and crowned queen at the end of the ball. then he thought, he doesn't know anything about his right hand woman. But that really didn't matter, because soon his robots would be in working order, and would lay off his henchmen, and not even Shego would be spared. But as we said before: something would go wrong (?)


"Your car is ready" said henchmen #28, who was assigned to garage duty this week."
"I didn't expect anything less. Wow, I can really see myself in the paint."
Shego walked around her bright green Cabrio once and was pleased with the shine of the paint.

"yeah, it would be bad if you couldn't see yourself, I had seven layers of my own specially-developed polish put on."

"Seven, wouldn't one have been fine?"

"yeah, but special cars, and special personalities need special attention"

Henchmen #28 admired shego. He wasn't in love with her, he had a great love named Vicky who he had been very lucky with, but Shego was the most ineteresting person he had ever met. How she masters the toughest situations, her fighting abilities and how she manages to get along with Drakken every day without killing him, He found it all amazing. He would never say it, but she was his idol, although he actually was planning on another career, like her.
"You know", he said, "I'm not always going to be henchmen #28, I'm going to start my own business. Auto sales and accessories and so on. I'm going to patent my car polish, and you see how great it is. It's going to make ma a millionaire"

Shego got behind the wheel.
"and why are you working for us, if you'd rather be the new autoking of the US?"
Normally Shego could care less about the henchmen and hated smalltalk. but her car was so nice and shiny it put her in an unusually good mood. That and the idea of meeting her old "friend" again.

[mrpotty]

Cool!
Some single translations didn't make any sense but in fact: This is what the first half of chapter one is about.

Some corrections:

"Here's the thing" she said nervously. - "What do you mean" she said annoyed.
Drakken went back to working on his robots, but he couldn't force himself to smile - Drakken (...) but he couldn't avoid to smile (He smiled. He couldn't force himself not to smile, but "nicht verkneifen" is hard to translate)
then he thought, he probably wouldn't know his right hand from his left - then he thought that doesn't know anything about his right hand (I don't know if it's the same in english, but a "right hand" is a personal sidekick or an assistant who does the most important work for you)
and would make a big splash with his henchmen, and not even Shego would be spared - a "Kündingungswelle" mean, that soon they will be all unemployed (Maybe big splahs means the same? I do not know!)

Thanx for the work so far.

[Carbon]

ahh I see.

no 'big splash" is different


I suppose "layoffs" would be the american english term.

and yes right hand is a term for 2nd in command. but I didn't understand what you were trying to say there exactly so I had to guess. I suppose the term would be "Right hand man" or "Right hand woman" not just "right hand" is what confusd me.

fun to practice transalation though

I fixed the story to make more sence, thanks for the corrections

[ShadowGirl]

OH! Now I get it!

[mrpotty]

Carbon said:

thanks for the corrections

This is my job. ;D

[vgh]

Is that suppose to be from Germany ?

[mrpotty]

When I understand your question right: yes.

[ShadowGirl]

I think he typed G ermany and it came out as the word germany!

[mrpotty]

Does anyone care that the completely senseless chapter three is finished?

[mrpotty]

Okay, tomorrow I'll put up the final chapter and then I'll try to translate it.

[mrpotty]

So here's my translation of chapter1. Tell me when I did some really big mistakes (I'm sure I did).
The first half of this chapter is of course the translation Carbon did a few weeks ago, I just added or changed some words to come a little bit closer to the original.
PS: Trust me! My writing is much better in my own language!

Chapter 1 – A Trip That Ends With A Bang

In "Attack of the Killer Bebes" Dr Drakken built woman robots, to get revenge on his school buddies. Shego was gone for the entire episode. Steve Loter, who works on the series, said once that she was not in that episode because she was at a wedding that time. This is the rest of the story of Shego's absence.

It was a normal day in Dr. Drakken's temporary lair.
Drakken's henchmen sat in front of the TV and watched soap operas, some were baking blueberry muffins. A few of them were naping. One of them while he was still standing. That brings us to the point: They were all doing things they weren't supposed to be doing.
Drakken himself was engrossed in his work. He was just about to complete his newest creation, Something that he had been working to perfect for decades: Robot women! He knew that this discovery would not only finally earn the respect of his old freinds, but would also bring him one step closer to world domination.
As we all know, he was so wrong.
Drakken's workshop door opened and Shego came in.
"I am outta here" she said
Drakken shrugged suprisedly and turned around.
"Outta here?! Where are you going? And why are you dressed up?"
This time, Shego wasn't wearing her normal uniform, that she almost always wore. She had, as she called it, "casual clothes" on. These "casual clothes" were antything but a plain old sweatsuit. They were all the best brands from Club Bannana- Not to exagerate, but not only were they elegant enough to get envious stares, but expensive enough too, not that she paid anything for them....
"What do you mean" she said annoyed. "I told you that I'm going to take the next three days off to visit an old friend."
Dr. Drakken thought about it a bit and decided, "Nope."
"What? The wedding? Of my old rival from school Jessica? Who was always second best when I was always first? Who swore to get revenge on me at the graduation ball?"
Drakken thought about it again: "Nope."
"Ugh, why do I even talk to you at all?! I mean, you are making women out of metal!"
Shego turned and left, shaking her head.
Drakken called out after her: "Titanium! Regular metal would be far too weak! Do you hear me, Shego? I keep talking and you are only interested in your own little world! And what finger is that? I hope that was only your index finger! Shego?! I'm talking to you young lady!"
Shego ignored Drakken as usual and kept walking. As Drakken went back to working on his robots, but he couldn't avoid smiling. He must have known how shego was going to the ball. with the puffy frill dress. Probably going with the star quarterback in his car and crowned queen at the end of the ball. then he thought, he doesn't know anything about his right hand woman. But that really didn't matter, because soon his robots would be in working order, and would lay off his henchmen, and not even Shego would be spared. But as we said before: he was so wrong.

"Your car is ready" said henchmen #28, who was assigned to garage duty this week.
"I didn't expect anything less. Wow, I can really see myself in the paint."
Shego walked around her bright green Cabrio once and was pleased with the shine of the paint.
"Yeah, it would be bad if you couldn't see yourself, I had seven layers of my own specially-developed polish put on."
"Seven, wouldn't one have been fine?"
"Yeah, but special cars, and special personalities need special attention"
Henchmen #28 admired shego. He wasn't in love with her, he had a fiancé named Vicky who he had been very lucky with, but Shego was the most interesting person he had ever met. How she masters the toughest situations, her fighting abilities and how she manages to get along with Drakken every day without killing him, He found it all amazing. He would never say it, but she was his idol, although he actually was planning on another career, like her.
"You know", he said, "I'm not always going to be henchmen #28, I'm going to start my own business. Auto sales and accessories and so on. I'm going to patent my car polish, and you see how great it is. It's going to make ma a millionaire"
Shego got behind the wheel.
"And why are you working for us, if you'd rather be the new autoking of the US?"
Normally Shego could care less about the henchmen and hated smalltalk. But her car was so nice and shiny it put her in an unusually good mood. That and the idea of meeting her old "friend" again.

A/N: From here it’s only my translation

„Well, when I’m on top, I want to stay there and do you know any better ways to stay on top than using illegal methods? I’m just getting here some basics and build up connections.“<br>„Maybe you should have made a better choice than being one of Drakken’s henchmen.“<br>„Well, sometimes you have to take what life offers to you. Have a nice trip.“<br>„Thank you. Good to know that at least one henchman knows how to use his brain.“<br>Shego stepped on it and shot outside. Just been there she had to brake hard. Although the layer was somewhere in the middle of the desert of Nevada and normally nobody else should be there, Shego almost hit someone with her car. A young woman in her early twentys. She looked like the typical cliché of a wallflower. She had a Pipi-Longstocking-hairdo, grey clothes and glasses. The car stopped exactly 0,72 mm before her (A/N: Sorry, I don’t know how much this is in american length, but is is very close).
After a few seconds in which everybody had to deal with their scare, Shego called: „Get out of my way!“<br>The woman just stared at Shego but didn’t moved or did something else.
„I count three, then I’ll go on. Doesn’t matter if you are still there or not. Two!“<br>This threat seems to work. The woman stepped away. Shego gave her an evil look and drove away.
In the next 1 ½ hours nothing interesting happened. The landscape around Shego was nothing but desert, there was only crap on the radio and she had listened one time too much to her CD’s. Whenever she saw a car, which happened unfortunaltely not too often, she pushed it just for fun off the street. Except for the huge, rusty truck. It made her kinda nervous. Maybe because the truck was pushing a car off the street for itself.
But nothing else happened.
Until henchman #28 heard a strange sound. It sounded like a pudding which slid slowly down the wall. #28 tried to figure out what this sound can be. He expected everything, but not what he finally found.
„Holy crap! This can’t be happening!“ he shouted and ran to the phone.
A few seconds later Shego’s carphone rang.
„Who’s there and why should I care?“ she said.
„Shego? Henchman #28 speaking!“<br>„What’s up?“<br>„Stop your car immediately!“<br>„When there’s no bomb on board, I don’t see any reason to do this. Is there a bomb on board?“<br>„I wish it would be just this, but it’s much worse! My polish has some...side effects.“<br>„Side effects?“<br>„Yes, I mean...I don’t know if it was really my polish. Usually it’s harmless, but ususally I use just one layer of it.“<br>„Just tell me, okay!“<br>„I also developed more layers on Drakken’s car, just five but...well. it melted.“<br>„Did you said it melted?“<br>„Yes! I don’t know if it really was my polish but when it was its fault you are sitting in a ticking timebomb!“<br>Shego didn’t want to buy this story, but when she saw how the door next to her became longer and longer and dripped all over the street, she whispered a silent: „Uh oh.“<br>Then the liquid formerly know as her bonnet splashed against the windshield and Shego stepped with both feet on the brakes. Because of this hard brake one of her front tires bursted and although Shego is a great driver, her car turned over for 12 times.
#28 was able to listen to most of the accident on the phone, but now he only heard a voice saying that „the person you’ve called is teporary not available“. He took a deep breathe and ran to the lounge, where the other henchmen were.
„Henchman #47! I need your car!“<br>#47 took slowly his keys out of his pocket and threw them to #28.
„Why do you need it?“<br>„No time for explainations. I killed Shego!“<br>„Okay, bring some beer when you come back.“<br>#28 ran back to the garage while #13 asked #47: „Did he said he killed Shego?“<br>„It sounded liked that.“<br>„You think he has?“<br>„Pfff, I dunno. Maybe. But I don‘t think so, because she’s not so easy to kill.“<br>„What if?“<br>„I guess we don’t get beaten up for so often anymore.“<br>„Okay.“<br>

[Timmy811]

"Then the liquid formerly know as her bonnet splashed against the windshield "

Good story, however it should be hood instead of bonnet. At least in America, I think Bonnet might be used in England.

[mrpotty]

I had the choice between hood and bonnet. I knew one is british one is american. I flipped a coin.

[FloW]

Wow that's something different I like the way you are telling storys ...

@ the guy who translated it above: Good job, dude^^