Post by taechunsa on Oct 3, 2005 23:19:04 GMT -5
Okay, I have decided to try my hand at a Kim Possible fanfcition. I don't have a lot of time so the story will probably be slow unfolding.
Therefore, before I spend a lot of time developing and writing the story I wanted a little feedback on the idea.
The tentative title is What Happens in Vegas Doesn’t Always Stay in Vegas, this is subject to change and most likely will before this is all said and done, but it gives me a focus.
The concept is that sometime during their senior year, after they have both turned 18, Ron and Kim go on a mission to stop Drakken.
The story will open as such:
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Ron slowly woke up with a splitting headache.
Looking around he took in what he could of his condition and location; he noted that he was in what appeared to be a hotel room from the layout and furnishings, that he was naked, and that he couldn’t remember how he had gotten there. In fact the last thing that he remembered was foiling Drakken’s latest attempt at world conquest with KP somewhere in Nevada.
When the mental effort of trying to figure out the situation set the dwarves in his skull to begin their angry cadence again Ron flopped back down onto the bed.
“Ughh!”
Despite Ron’s pain addled mind he was positive that beds didn’t moan. So with great effort he rolled over and looked at what lie below him.
“KP!” Ron hollered as he tumbled out of bed and onto the floor. Instantly regretting both actions he grabbed his head in pain.
“Not so loud Ron, my head is killing me,” the completely naked Kim Possible said as she grabbed the sheet and rolled over to go back to sleep.
As Ron grabbed for a blanket to cover himself he noticed a sparkle on his ring finger.
“Oh man, Kim’s dad is going to shoot me into a black hole for sure now,” Ron said with a whimper as he compared the wedding band on his hand with the one sticking out of the sheet on Kim’s hand.
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The primary arc will deal with Kim and Ron suddenly being married and all of the character’s reactions to this.
What exactly happened between defeating Drakken and the beginning of the story is going to be one of the primary secondary arcs of the story. With Kim and Ron trying to piece together everything that they did.
It shouldn’t be too long and is meant as a rather light and fun piece with a bit of seriousness thrown in for contrast.
Does it have promise? Is it original (has someone already done something very similar)? (The quality is a bit lower then I like, but it is a rough first draft.)
For comparison, my other story idea would deal with Kim, Ron, and a handful of other students being stranded on a deserted Pacific island. This idea isn’t as well thought out as the Vegas idea, but I like it almost as well.
So, what does everyone think?
Therefore, before I spend a lot of time developing and writing the story I wanted a little feedback on the idea.
The tentative title is What Happens in Vegas Doesn’t Always Stay in Vegas, this is subject to change and most likely will before this is all said and done, but it gives me a focus.
The concept is that sometime during their senior year, after they have both turned 18, Ron and Kim go on a mission to stop Drakken.
The story will open as such:
************************************************
Ron slowly woke up with a splitting headache.
Looking around he took in what he could of his condition and location; he noted that he was in what appeared to be a hotel room from the layout and furnishings, that he was naked, and that he couldn’t remember how he had gotten there. In fact the last thing that he remembered was foiling Drakken’s latest attempt at world conquest with KP somewhere in Nevada.
When the mental effort of trying to figure out the situation set the dwarves in his skull to begin their angry cadence again Ron flopped back down onto the bed.
“Ughh!”
Despite Ron’s pain addled mind he was positive that beds didn’t moan. So with great effort he rolled over and looked at what lie below him.
“KP!” Ron hollered as he tumbled out of bed and onto the floor. Instantly regretting both actions he grabbed his head in pain.
“Not so loud Ron, my head is killing me,” the completely naked Kim Possible said as she grabbed the sheet and rolled over to go back to sleep.
As Ron grabbed for a blanket to cover himself he noticed a sparkle on his ring finger.
“Oh man, Kim’s dad is going to shoot me into a black hole for sure now,” Ron said with a whimper as he compared the wedding band on his hand with the one sticking out of the sheet on Kim’s hand.
*************************************************
The primary arc will deal with Kim and Ron suddenly being married and all of the character’s reactions to this.
What exactly happened between defeating Drakken and the beginning of the story is going to be one of the primary secondary arcs of the story. With Kim and Ron trying to piece together everything that they did.
It shouldn’t be too long and is meant as a rather light and fun piece with a bit of seriousness thrown in for contrast.
Does it have promise? Is it original (has someone already done something very similar)? (The quality is a bit lower then I like, but it is a rough first draft.)
For comparison, my other story idea would deal with Kim, Ron, and a handful of other students being stranded on a deserted Pacific island. This idea isn’t as well thought out as the Vegas idea, but I like it almost as well.
So, what does everyone think?
