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Post by recon228 on Oct 28, 2005 14:05:26 GMT -5
Alright, here it is... the long-awaited revamp of my very first fanfiction A Loss of Innocence. While the basic plot is still the same, the dialogue, transition scenes, and ending is going to be different. Here's the link to it over at FF.net - A Loss of Innocence: ReduxSynopsis: Kim’s father has been kidnapped and the FBI has taken control of the investigation. Despite their warnings Kim decides to carry out her own investigation and soon finds that this enemy is like nothing Team Possible has ever dealt with. With help from some unusual sources, Kim and Ron set out to rescue her father. What she doesn’t know, however, is that this mission will eventually force her to choose between her father’s safety and her own moral beliefs.Chapter 1 is up right now, and new chapters will follow on a semi-weekly basis (Provided they don't interfere with Bailout and Thin Blue Line). It's rated 'T' right now, but that will change in the next few chapters. |
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Post by jmt2005791 on Oct 28, 2005 14:27:03 GMT -5
it fairly good so far i like it. keep up the good work
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Post by recon228 on Oct 29, 2005 16:00:26 GMT -5
it fairly good so far i like it. keep up the good work Thanks...  |
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Post by recon228 on Oct 31, 2005 0:05:14 GMT -5
Chapter 2 is up over at FF.net, check it out...
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Post by jmt2005791 on Nov 3, 2005 4:50:47 GMT -5
hey great chapter . i can't believe kim's going to wind up i jail. wow i have to say you have my attention i'm looking forward to the next chapter.
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Post by recon228 on Nov 4, 2005 2:38:19 GMT -5
hey great chapter . i can't believe kim's going to wind up i jail. wow i have to say you have my attention i'm looking forward to the next chapter. Thanks, I'm glad to hear you're enjoying the story...  |
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Post by aliciamartin on Nov 4, 2005 21:06:36 GMT -5
wow great story hope theres more soon  |
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Post by recon228 on Nov 6, 2005 22:15:36 GMT -5
Wow great story, hope there's more soon There will be; I'm just finishing up the next chapter of KP: The Thin Blue Line, then I'll hammer out another chapter of ALoI: Redux. |
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Post by recon228 on Nov 13, 2005 1:37:11 GMT -5
Chapter 3 is up over at FF.net, check it out...
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Post by Ezbok58a on Nov 13, 2005 16:41:18 GMT -5
I said it over on ff.net I have no Idea how I missed the original story but this is awsome!
Never saw that twist coming! Good job!
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Post by recon228 on Nov 13, 2005 21:05:37 GMT -5
I said it over on ff.net I have no Idea how I missed the original story but this is awsome! Never saw that twist coming! Good job! Thank you, it's always nice to hear other people say they're enjoying your story.  That's not the last big twist either... ;D |
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Post by taechunsa on Nov 15, 2005 12:04:32 GMT -5
I skimmed the revamp. The changes look good. I am also glad that you are going to change the ending. The old one just had way too many oddities about it.
However, I am going to wait until the entire revamp is complete to read it.
Keep up the good work.
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Post by recon228 on Nov 15, 2005 22:59:45 GMT -5
However, I am going to wait until the entire revamp is complete to read it. That's understandable... I can see the benefit in not having to wait for the next chapter to be uploaded. |
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