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Post by drakkenyay on Oct 31, 2005 12:44:35 GMT -5
yes i have just started my first fanfic and please tell em what u think of it or review it, or whatever you feel like kk i hope u all like it too and here it is www.fanfiction.net/s/2637079/1/ |
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Post by Winterfrost on Nov 1, 2005 6:22:24 GMT -5
Don't take this the wrong way, but Shego is so ooc. That, however, is what makes the story "D/S-able", so I will not go anymore into that nor blame you about it......
Your writing ability is way batter than mine. Your language arts is amazing! What do you have to do to get language arts like that?
Overall, a very interesting fanfic. I'm awaiting the next installment!
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Post by drakkenyay on Nov 1, 2005 11:50:23 GMT -5
i see what u mean and yes i appreciate the critiques, but im willing to go one step further with them XD i know lots write about shego pushing drakken away unwillingly, or doesnt blush, or keeps on denying that she loves him. but yes i do know deep in her heart she does care. whether it is love or not. i can't assume. but i know she cares. in emotion sickness it changed my whole perspective of the two. and it is clearly evident that it shows more drakken liking shego, then her liking him. but yah i can see some affection within her too. i dont mean to spoil my fanfic, but basically they are going to.....yes XD get it on. and yes i appreciate ur compliments as well and thank u too
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