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Post by surforst on Nov 17, 2005 1:34:11 GMT -5
Well finally update this one. Now I'm posting it here. I plan to do this for my three other stories when I update them. Hope you like this. Story can be found here. www.fanfiction.net/s/2617445/1/chapters - 4 so far. Summary: AU where the KP characters are now in the Gundam universe. Basically its the UN(mostly America) vs the colonies. Our classic characters though find themselves on opposite sides of the conflict. Rated T for violence, sexual references (minor), and language (minor). Well hope you enjoy. I'm using this thread to allow me to make easier remarks to any questions or suggestions I get on this story. |
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Post by Ezbok58a on Nov 17, 2005 13:41:57 GMT -5
I enjoy it so far.
However Something tells me I am not going to like the ending (I really am not a fan of either Ron or Kim dying in a fic) Everyone else is ok though.
Coming from me this is a good story, I have a immense Hatred for Giant fighting Robot suits, Yet this is a good story.
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Post by surforst on Nov 17, 2005 15:39:00 GMT -5
I enjoy it so far. However Something tells me I am not going to like the ending (I really am not a fan of either Ron or Kim dying in a fic) Everyone else is ok though. Coming from me this is a good story, I have a immense Hatred for Giant fighting Robot suits, Yet this is a good story. Ron or Kim dying...why would I do that?  Anyway thanks. I suggest you check out the Gundam series(the UC version). You got to stick with it for a while but it does bring up good points to think about. Its not all senseless violence after all. Now the latter stuff like Seed I can see where you'd pass that up. |
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Post by Ezbok58a on Nov 17, 2005 16:32:31 GMT -5
Ron or Kim dying...why would I do that? See, this is what happens when I don't follow a certain series (Gundam being in this case) Kim vs Ron, That I could get along with (and you've done a good job so far) But I thought you said that there will be a Character Death?  That could be me assuming the worst and Completely forgeting about the other charaters in the story. Now with Ch 4 up I see several possible charaters that could die. Tara, Yuri, Mr. Possible, Kim, Ron, and Mopnique all have possiblilities to go out. |
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Post by surforst on Nov 17, 2005 16:58:15 GMT -5
Ron or Kim dying...why would I do that? See, this is what happens when I don't follow a certain series (Gundam being in this case) Kim vs Ron, That I could get along with (and you've done a good job so far) But I thought you said that there will be a Character Death? That could be me assuming the worst and Completely forgeting about the other charaters in the story. Now with Ch 4 up I see several possible charaters that could die. Tara, Yuri, Mr. Possible, Kim, Ron, and Mopnique all have possiblilities to go out. I killed Wade. I think he's a character. Nice one too. Besides in every Gundam series people die all over the place. Look at Victory they killed an entire squad off before the end. Only one or two of the gals in it survived. Therefore expect others to die. I won't say who though but certain characters are annoying me right now so they'll die first. |
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Post by surforst on Dec 1, 2005 1:41:31 GMT -5
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Post by surforst on Dec 8, 2005 23:35:35 GMT -5
Chapter 6 is up now. Its a long one. By my standards at least. www.fanfiction.net/s/2617445/6/Warning: Following chapter contains character death as well as sexual references. Minor though it is I felt a warning should be given. Noting explicit involved though. Hope you enjoyed it. It took me a while to write and figure out how I wanted this to flow. As always read and review please. |
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Post by surforst on Dec 16, 2005 1:21:12 GMT -5
Chapter 7 is now up. www.fanfiction.net/s/2617445/7/Lead up to the critical battle. The fate of the war could come down to the next battle though there still the mopping up. Let the Light reveal who the victor is *hint hint*. Anyway hope you all are enjoying this story. Though I've got a sneaking suspicon that none of you actually read this. It's all good though I've got over 1200 hits on it already. HA! Oh wait I should ask you to review before I gloat. Hm...I should work on that. |
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Post by Ezbok58a on Dec 16, 2005 1:24:27 GMT -5
Nice, still unsure of what exactly is going on in all of this but that's my lack of Gundam Knowledge talking.
One question though, How the hell did Mon. die? I think I missed that part.
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Post by surforst on Dec 16, 2005 1:32:54 GMT -5
She was in the red mobile suit that Ron shot as he passed by. I'll give you the direct line.
A red Mobile Suit was blocking the Major path
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With that Ron raised his rifle as he passed the surprised suit. It never saw the shot which hit it right in the chest. From the location he judged that it went right through the cockpit. The explosion a second latter showed it really didn’t matter.
The whole point was the fact that Ron would have no idea who he had killed. She was just some unfortunate pilot at the wrong place on the battlefield.
Anyway I'll try to sum it up. Colonies want total independence so they declare war on Earth. Reasons aside for this it starts a massive war. This story focuses on Ron's part in this after he recieves his Gundam and the eventual confrontation bewteen him and Kim. Epic battle and all that good stuff. Does that help?
Glad your enjoying the story. I'm trying to write it in a way that a non-Gundam fan can get into it. In the end it's basically a Sci-Fi war story after all.
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Post by Ezbok58a on Dec 16, 2005 1:37:45 GMT -5
Helps a bunch. And so far it is reading as a Sci-Fi war  Never though that it was Monique in that suit, huh. It also helps that I don't know the storyline of Gundam, which leads to everything you write in it a surprise. ;D You are also recieving a lot of flack for the Bonnie/Ron thing, I figured you'd get some but Wow. Alot of people really hate Bonnie. |
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Post by surforst on Dec 16, 2005 3:13:11 GMT -5
Helps a bunch. And so far it is reading as a Sci-Fi war Never though that it was Monique in that suit, huh. It also helps that I don't know the storyline of Gundam, which leads to everything you write in it a surprise. ;D You are also recieving a lot of flack for the Bonnie/Ron thing, I figured you'd get some but Wow. Alot of people really hate Bonnie. Well I borrow from the Gundam story some. The upcoming battle will show bits of it but the overall plot well surprise even the most hardcore Gundam fans. As for the anti-Ron/Bon it surprised me too. So many people want the poor girl dead it surprises me. Yet I write a pure Ron/Bon story and people go insane with joy, well ok three people, so I'm a little confused here. Anyway when Kim and Ron meet up again it'll be an interesting thing. Kim will be the other woman after all though in her eyes she had first claim. I love writing cat fights even though the scare me so. |
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Post by surforst on Feb 15, 2006 4:50:15 GMT -5
Been a while since I've updated. Anyway chapter 8 is up and now I have a beta. I'm a happy author. www.fanfiction.net/s/2617445/8/By the way did you know this story was a fusion. Just mentioning the fact. ;D Well enjoy. |
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Post by surforst on Mar 24, 2006 0:23:26 GMT -5
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