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Post by Artificial Moose on Jan 29, 2006 15:58:11 GMT -5
::idly wonders if anyone noticed that the Ron/Shego kiss was designed to parody both the ES and StD kisses...::
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Post by Artificial Moose on Jan 29, 2006 16:04:58 GMT -5
The only real surprise in the chapter was the dude behind this all and why he was doing it. Still say the motive is crazy better to finish off your opponent instead of risking them nailing you. Oh well you guys set it up well enough that by the third chapter it was clear who the Agent Gray was. Good job. Good bit with Kim too glad to see certain things are going on with her. There still a chance for those two kids after all as shown with various actions. Still wondering when you'll finally end their suffering but in the mean time I wonder if our boy Wade will figure a few things out. Well all I can say is get back to work and get the next chapter out. Your readers are waiting after all. ;D Just be patient; we're not even halfway done, after all! ;D There is still a lot of story to go. As for Bortel's plot... why destroy your enemy, when you can get them to work for you? Far more efficient use of resources, after all. Besides, for us, that way is more fun.  |
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Post by Ezbok58a on Jan 29, 2006 22:52:12 GMT -5
Chapter 3 got me feeling bad and depressed, but Moose's chapter 4 reeled me back in with athority!
Not even half way done Eh?
You guys got some work to do........Back to work
*cracks a whip*
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Post by mattb3671 on Jan 30, 2006 17:26:30 GMT -5
*thinking of some evil Ron/Shego smuff* Gee, I wonder if Shego is that lovely shade of puke green all over... I wish she'd put on some KP pants so I could sneak a look down them.  Awesome job by the Wes-meister on Chapter 4. He was in a tough spot, and he pulled it out dandy! Way to go, hombre!  |
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Post by surforst on Jan 30, 2006 19:19:26 GMT -5
*thinking of some evil Ron/Shego smufgaffe* I'm sure evil Kimmie going to get ticked off when she learns that Shego is feeling up her Ron. She might not think she loves him anymore but I don't see her allowing other girls to get near him. After all evil Kimmie is selfish and tends to talk to herself. I don't know how the talking to herself part will effect her reaction but I can't see it as anything good. By the way I might have missed this already but did you guys mention who the next writer was? |
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Post by zaratan on Jan 30, 2006 19:25:03 GMT -5
Captain Kodak is next on deck, followed by MrDrP with his second chapter, and then I make my triumphant appearance in chapter 7.
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Post by taechunsa on Jan 30, 2006 21:02:08 GMT -5
Moose, excellent chapter. A great recovery and startling revelations. I had my suspicions about what was happening. I was both right and wrong. Or I was partially on the money.
Did you pick part of this out of another story? In one line you refence someone named Greves modeling underwear for Ron. Was this supposed to be Kim or did I totally miss something?
How many chapters are you guys writing for this?
Keep 'em coming.
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Post by Artificial Moose on Jan 30, 2006 21:24:41 GMT -5
Moose, excellent chapter. A great recovery and startling revelations. I had my suspicions about what was happening. I was both right and wrong. Or I was partially on the money. Glad you enjoyed it, and I am also glad, in a sense, that you hadn't yet fully figured out the plot ;D. Greve was the Italian city in Chapter 1 (MrDrP). The underwear modeling was a reference to when Kim did this in Chapter 2 (Mattb3671). I think the sentence lost a bit of clarity between head and keyboard. There are, ah, 12 chapters in all, so we're about a third of the way done. The really fun part is yet to come. |
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Post by Artificial Moose on Jan 30, 2006 21:31:57 GMT -5
*thinking of some evil Ron/Shego smuff* Gee, I wonder if Shego is that lovely shade of puke green all over... Use your imagination . ... PUKE green? That's the best shade you can come up with?  Go with celadon. It just sounds cooler. Thanks. |
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Post by moleratsrule on Jan 31, 2006 17:08:46 GMT -5
god that is sodding amazing ;D hurry up with the next few chapters, ive made this my fanfic to obsess over  |
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Post by mattb3671 on Feb 1, 2006 17:04:25 GMT -5
I had to go with puke green, 'cause Shego's so evil. She's Dr. Evil evil. She's lumpy mashed potatoes bad.
This said, she could eat all the crackers she wants to in my bed. ;D
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Post by Artificial Moose on Feb 24, 2006 10:41:41 GMT -5
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Post by mattb3671 on Feb 24, 2006 12:09:53 GMT -5
Peeps, Cap's chap is mega-delish!
If you want some evil Rondo, and want to see KP take her licks, ba-darn! It's right there!
go Cap!
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Post by airwalker on Feb 24, 2006 15:08:16 GMT -5
Chapter 5, this one by Captainkodak1, is now up. Mwa-hahahahaha.... Just finished reading the latest chapter and well you guys are really taking everything to the edge! You almost really lost me in chapter 3 (I'm in favor of K/R although I can accept stories where they don't end up together - but not like Chapter 3!) but I decided to hang on and so far its been worth it. Kim's pretty much hitting rock bottom here and her parents realize that something is incredibly off base with her behavior but I can't understand how GJ or more specifically Dr. Director isn't more suspicious of what the hell is going on. She's entertained outlandish type theories before (i.e. The Ron and then Rufus Factor; I accept them as a real factor in Kim's success but Dr. Director was willing to put her entire organization to work on what at first glance might not exactly seem worthy of research) but with Ron AND Wade outed as evil agents plus Kims behavior, some alarm bells should be going off somewhere that something isn't right. Dr. Director just doesn't strike me as if she's thinking like a spy here. She comes off more as a bureaucrat accepting the situation as it is rather than creatively thinking about it. I can buy Kim not concentrating on it because she's basically mostly brainwashed and just got beaten up and Will Du is just an idiot/jerk so he's not going to help much. But we're talking about Ron and Wade being completely out of character here from the characters point of view. In fact Kim even gives the suggestion that he's acting like Zorpax which in itself should get some wheels turning since he was only like that due to some malfunctioning evil equipment. (And shouldn't GJ have been more concerned about Wade going evil than about Ron? After all Wade can really damage GJ in a couple of minutes on the computer than Ron can.) Anyway I'm curious which way your going to take Zorpox; when I finished reading this chapter all I could imagine was the last scene from the latest Justice League episode, the one where Lex Luthor seizes control of the Legion of Doom from Gorrilla Grodd. I could imagine a confrontation between Bortol and Zorpox going exactly like that scene, almost word for word: Zorpox: That's your great plan? Bortol: Yes. **Zorpox sighs slightly, as if he were bored with what he had just heard** Zorpox: I was going to wait a few more weeks before I did this but..... **Takes out a gun and just shoots Bortol point blank in the head. Then stands up and addresses the gathered villains** Zorpox: Listen up. I'm in charge now. Any objections? **Villains shrug at each other and look back at him; Shego walks up to him, wraps her arms around him, and just whispers seductively in his ear "No problem at all, Baby". He just looks forward and smiles.** That was more or less the Lex/Grodd scene and I can so see that happening here. After all Zorpox was a strategic and imaginative thinker; I can't see him staying loyal to Bortol and not having his own plan or ideas to go after. I'd be suprised if Bortol makes it past a few more chapters. Say, one question - since Kim and Ron and Wade are all effectively brainwashed, GJ is clueless, and the Possible parents don't have enough of a grasp of mad science to make all the connections, does that mean that everything, including the K/R relationship is hanging in Shego's hands? |
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Post by Commander Argus on Feb 24, 2006 15:21:47 GMT -5
I tend to call Shego's color 'mint' green since she's about the same color as the green part of an Andes mint.
**THUD**
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Post by Pim Peccable on Feb 24, 2006 15:25:33 GMT -5
I tend to call Shego's color 'mint' green since she's about the same color as the green part of an Andes mint. **THUD** I did much the same with an OC that was a clone of Shego and ... (why spoil it now) ... I said she had 'mint green' hair. ----- "Darkness" really does describe this story. Awesome chap, Cap! The Rongo, the evil, most compelling! Only one negative word; "Spelling"  |
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Post by The Marvelous Me on Feb 26, 2006 12:10:06 GMT -5
Awesome story guys, just a couple of quick questions.
First what is up with Kim and Ron saying the word "cow?" Is it like a trigger or something?
Second if I'm to understand correctly Bortel brainwashed Kim, making her emotions of hatred more powerful while suppressing feelings of love, especially towards Ron. So then why is that all of a sudden in chapter five she's all like what have I done and how she wants to see him again? Did the brainwashing just magically wear off?
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Post by zaratan on Feb 26, 2006 12:12:31 GMT -5
To answer your questions...
1. SPOILER
2. SPOILER and SPOILER.
Hope that cleared things up a bit! ;D
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Post by Artificial Moose on Feb 26, 2006 12:35:22 GMT -5
First what is up with Kim and Ron saying the word "cow?" Is it like a trigger or something? Second if I'm to understand correctly Bortel brainwashed Kim, making her emotions of hatred more powerful while suppressing feelings of love, especially towards Ron. So then why is that all of a sudden in chapter five she's all like what have I done and how she wants to see him again? Did the brainwashing just magically wear off? We replaced Kim Possible with a Cylon copy, model Number 11. There is, however, a temporary glitch in the personality programming, and we fear that we might have to box her. |
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Post by Ezbok58a on Feb 26, 2006 17:39:58 GMT -5
First what is up with Kim and Ron saying the word "cow?" Is it like a trigger or something? Second if I'm to understand correctly Bortel brainwashed Kim, making her emotions of hatred more powerful while suppressing feelings of love, especially towards Ron. So then why is that all of a sudden in chapter five she's all like what have I done and how she wants to see him again? Did the brainwashing just magically wear off? We replaced Kim Possible with a Cylon copy, model Number 11. There is, however, a temporary glitch in the personality programming, and we fear that we might have to box her. I could fix that, just send her over my way! ;D |
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